Story : Abhijeet Ke Ateet Ka (Asli) Raaz

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visrom

@visrom

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Posted: 11 years ago

#81

Thanks Diya and GS. 😊

GS...where have you been all these days?

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GIRL_SHERLOCK

@GIRL_SHERLOCK

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Posted: 11 years ago

#82

Hey Visrom!

Just busy with School and stuff.

I hope to be more active now. 😊

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Debasree

@debasree04

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Posted: 11 years ago

#83

Finally read it!
I told u earlier also that its very difficult to match with FW's version specially when FW's writers are very poor in facts but vis, u did it very well...👏
Most importantly i found the most imp clarification of Abhi's behaviour towards ACP sir & Daya sir in your version while FW failed to show that why Abhi behaved weirdly...is it due to medicine or his guilt of killing someone...i love that u choose 2nd one in your version rather medicines.
Ronnie/Ranvijay part is quite interesting specially his real identity...
Its mentioned in few episodes that Abhijeet's kidnapping is related to some drug racket/gang [If i m not wrong] & your version does not oppose that fact...
Very good job vis...really enjoy it!

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gadhadada

@gadhadada

Achiever

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Posted: 11 years ago

#84

VIS DII, I really Enjoyed Your Story alot...👏👏

its Something called Outstanding...⭐️⭐️

Especially to Fill those Holes which FW makes by their Blunders...😆😆

Except BLUE Part (cz it presented by FW 😉😉)...

I Loved all...😳👏👏

That Dream part...😊😊

U really showed Sharp Shine Sharp Brain...⭐️⭐️

Loved when Baray Bhai Prepared that Sketch of DILIP...⭐️⭐️

then contact ASHA to Search that Man...⭐️⭐️

then VASHI Contact...⭐️⭐️

went DILIP house ...⭐️⭐️

after that His Mental Trauma...⭐️⭐️

to Escape or Face...⭐️⭐️

Awesome...⭐️⭐️

then Bhai Entry...😉😉

I Liked that Cheena Jhapti revealed that Sketch...😆😆

then Bhai whole Story...👏👏

i really find it APT and in CONNECTION...⭐️⭐️

hmmm, Simply Splendid...⭐️⭐️⭐️

U really Connect Both MEMORY LOSS and that DREAM or say Undercover Mission Awesomely...⭐️⭐️⭐️

its really beyond Expectation Point which U Portrayed...⭐️⭐️⭐️

I Like that whole Mission where ACP Shelinder Headed it...👏👏

Bhai Inclusion was Unexpected...😉👏

then ACP Sir Entry and asking about Baray Bhai Existence in Mumbai...👏👏

then that AD...👏👏

Yes, That Inclusion Part U showed Little Hurriedly as I dunt think that any Gang without any Scanning about background of their Customers, Entering them so Easily especially New Customers...😕😕

then that Plan...😊😊

very Good ...👍🏼👍🏼

But how that news revealed that any Police Officer be there...?😕😕

any Insider Involvement... hmmm...😉😉

then whole Shooting Idea was Fantastic...👏👏

after that ACP Sir Teasing and then Revealing that...😆👏👏

RONNIE Suspense was Classic and His Revealing was too...⭐️⭐️

I Loved that in that Scenario, Abhijeet Sir Sharp Qualities...⭐️⭐️

then RONNIE Arrests and DILIP Death...⭐️⭐️

Really DII, Hats Off as its an Absolute Masterpiece...⭐️

its really ABHIJEET KAY ATEETH KA RAAZ...👏

Thank You so very much...😳😳

NOTE: plz Tell Me, in which Epi ACP Sir said that Bhai is with Baray Bhai... thatswhy U make Him His Junior...😕😕

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#85

Thanks for reading and commenting, GD. 🤗

Originally posted by: gadhadada

Yes, That Inclusion Part U showed Little Hurriedly as I dunt think that any Gang without any Scanning about background of their Customers, Entering them so Easily especially New Customers...😕😕

Do you think they didn't? I preferred to keep it in the background. I am writing the story from duo's side. Abhijeet didn't know if they did any background check and he didn't tell Daya in 1997, so when Daya is narrating the flashback he doesn't know.

It's something like - Ronnie comes to pick each caller and if he notices something wrong he shoots them immediately. he also takes the address of a known person, right (forgot what I wrote as it's more than a month back) He sends it to his team and they check. Abhijeet managed to escape the background checks well.

But how that news revealed that any Police Officer be there...?😕😕

You can assume that Daya was trying to track the location of the landline number to which Abhijeet made the call. It was mentioned in the paper. Somehow the goons came to know that police is tracking them...and maybe someone sent a message to the boss. Boss thought it's only one. (he's a fool 😆)

NOTE: plz Tell Me, in which Epi ACP Sir said that Bhai is with Baray Bhai... thatswhy U make Him His Junior...😕😕

Stolen Dynamite - at the start ACP tells Jayant..that Daya bhi uske saath kaam kar chuka hai. And we know that Daya called him 'sir', means he was his junior. Rest of it...the first meeting of duo etc is my own.

The Vashi arms case is also mentioned in the scene where ACP shows previous photos to Abhijeet after the memory loss. 😛 I just made Daya and Dilip part of the case.